Saturday, January 18, 2014

The Last Promise

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“There is a serial killer around”, she fearfully whispered. Switching off the TV, he held her close.
“Don’t worry darling, I’ll always be there with you” he hugged her tightly. 
“Where could he be?” she wondered in his arms.
His knife glistened in red, little did she know, she would be next.







This post is my first attempt at 55 fiction, written as a part of the Write Tribe prompt.

 55 Fiction,  is a form of microfiction that refers to the works of fiction that are either limited to a maximum of fifty-five words or have a requirement of exactly 55 words. The origin of 55 Fiction can be traced to a short story writing contest organized by New Times, an independent alternative weekly in San Luis Obispo, California, in 1987.The idea was proposed by New Times founder and publisher Steve Moss.



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60 comments:

  1. OH DAMN!!!! That was unexpected!

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    1. Yeah, actually made me want to write more about it

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    1. I think I have been watching too much of Criminal Minds :)

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  4. nice attempt for your first...twists are more often than not very dangerous !!!

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  5. Ohhh that was some twist ...
    I have also attempted it for the first time :)

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    1. Just read them! Yayy, I have such lovely conpany :)

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  6. Superb! Makes you yearn for more!!

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  7. Yikes!! Now that was chilling!!
    Superb! :)

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    1. Hehehe, Thanks for stopping by Pixie :)

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  8. This is so terrifying and uve captured the thrilling suspense with deft. Well done, Seeta:)

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  9. Amazing ! Most unexpected twist has made the story so wonderful.

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  10. Well written first attempt!

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  11. Yikes now you've creeped me out.

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    1. Damn! let me tell you a secret, I was in a rather murderous mood over my maid's antics when I wrote it.... err maybe that can help see the humour in it :P

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  12. OMG!! That's scary! A wow twist in the tale! :)

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  13. Gosh! That gave me the creeps *shivers*! Good attempt.

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    1. Thanks Rachna! You know how much your views matter to me :)

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  14. This reminds me of the movie 'Kaun' :) Very scary fiction, Seeta, but a good one :)

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  15. Nice & scary, especially for a first attempt!

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  16. Nice one... The image looks scary :)

    Aditya Manchanda
    www.eatoutsdelhi.net

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    1. Thanks Aditya.. well I tried picking up the least scary pic from out there :P

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  17. Somehow, this Sherlock Holmes Fan knew that he'll be the one! :)
    Great one, Seeta:)

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    1. hahaha! Do you watch Criminal Minds? That would have made you think so too :)

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  18. The picture gave me a clue..and I could predict that she was next.

    :) Nice one..

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  19. Chilling.. and this 55-word fiction could be a wonderful script for a 2 hour thriller.. :-D

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    1. Oh Yes! Which actually reminds me of a movie.."Kaun" the one starring Urmila Matondkar remember?

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  20. Wow! This is one form I never ever attempt - doing it well is SO difficult and you did it so seemingly effortlessly.

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    1. I tried it for the first time.. kinda liked it... Thanks Suresh :)

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  21. wow that was unexpected ! Sent chills down my spine!

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  22. Somebody has made it to "Top Post" ...well done!

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  23. Scary! Brilliant first attempt!

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  24. I got an inkling of what was about to unfold. Been reading too many thrillers I think.

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  25. This is great--not at all like a first effort.

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    1. That means a lot to me Indu! Thanks :)

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  26. Good attempt, given this is ur first..... But there is scope for improvement dear :))

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    1. Like I said its a first attempt, obviously there is a long way ahead for me :)

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